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Review:MissMdsty says:
Oh my Lord! I'm hooked! :D And this is your requested review!

I liked this first chapter a lot. You bring us these three OC female characters that are seemingly unrelated but I'm sure they'll cross paths at some point. Since so far nothing connects them, I'll talk about each part of the chapter separately.

Part 1: I liked the descriptions a lot. The atmosphere and everything about it made me feel like I was on the platform too, looking at the train. The character is very original. At first you'd think she was just another student, then you find out she's an orphan and finally you learn that she's under Auror custody. Which makes me think that she had something to do with her mother's death, since she is presented as a malicious person.

I liked her interactions with James II. She seems like the kind of woman who gets what she wants and know how to get it, but James may just be an even match. I'm looking forward to seeing how they get on while at Hogwarts. And also learning how she got herself into this mess!

I noticed two spelling mistakes in this part:
"while small children crying" - while small children cried.
"I would have to thank Mr. Harry Potter one day, personally off course" - of course.

They aren't major, really, I just wanted you to see I was paying attention! :)

Part 2: The fall from grace of a princess? That's how I see it! We have this character that has literally everything but her family's support and
she's going through the hardest thing a woman can go through.

I think it's going to be hard for her to go without all she's used to, but I have a feeling she and Louis will get by. And while we're on the subject, I was so surprised to see that Louis was the father! But he stood by her and I'm proud of him for that! Fleur and Bill raised him right. Though I'm sure there is a story behind all of this, especially since she said they hated each other. I guess that puts "make love not war" into a whole new perspective!

Part 3: This was my favorite out of them all! Her job, her past, her gift! Everything was just mind blowing! This was so detailed and put me right there with her! I was so anxious when the man started following her. I thought about Greyback. Maybe? No? Hey, it's a guess! Also, perhaps the Auror is somebody we know as well?

Honestly, I have no comments on this section. It was perfection delivered in the form of fiction.

I have to say that this story shows a great improvement in your writting. I've read all the other stories you requested for and this is by far the best! You don't leave any stones unturned, any loose ends and the plot is built up in such a way that I'm eager to learn more! Good job, darling! Please let me know when you update!

Ral

Author's Response: Hey Ral!! Nice to see you again!

Im so glad you liked it! I fixed the mistakes you pointed out and I can see how you much you paid attention :P

Part 2 was hard to write since it felt so cliche and unexciting compared to Part 1 which is why i stuck it into the middle you know, to avoid people from losing interest :P

Everyone loved Part 3 :P Its funny, since I thought i had mentioned her name and Auror's name as well but I guess not :P I'll do tht soon haaha.

Aww thank you so much! That truly means a lot so thank you! Will do!


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