I saw that you were having a bad day, so I decided to leave you a random in the hope that this will cheer you up! Then seeing that this was about Percy and was inspired by the brilliant Mumford & Sons I knew I had to read this!
I really liked how you described all the expectations Percy had upon him, as it made you view him a different light, as it made you think whether there wasn't anything he could do about his actions, as he was born like that. It also highlighted how different he is to his family, because no offence to family, and I love the Weasleys but there not overtly ambition, and seem quite content with their lives, but you never seem to feel that with Percy, and that's probably due to all the expectations held upon him.
I also really liked how you showed how the siblings grouped off, with Bill and Charlie being very close, and then the younger ones being close. Even though Percy seemed hurt that no one listened to him, it made me laugh, as I can just imagine the outraged expression on his face when they failed to listen to one of his speeches!
I then really liked how Percy viewed his family when on the ladder. We'll I didn't like the thoughts as they were anti-Weasley, but they seemed very fitting of him for that moment in time, and I can imagine him thinking that. By also seeing his thoughts, it allows you to put his actions into context, and perhaps have a little more sympathy for acting the way he did towards them.
Then the part about how easily people can be swayed into thinking lies were true was great. I loved the use of the word poisoned it just seemed to fit his situation so well.
Then his realisation was great, and it made you realise how horrible it must have been for him, and how he reached so high, and he couldn't turn back, and when h died he fell so far, and it culminated in Fred's death.
I thought the narration of the story was great, as it was a really unique way of doing it. I also loved the idea of the story as it was really original and a very interesting perspective to explore.
I'm really glad that I read this, and I hope this help cheer you up Rachel :')
P.s. sorry if there are any weird typos I wrote this on my phone :/
Author's Response: Aaand I'm nearly a month late in responding to this, as well! I do get to all my responses eventually, but somehow they've been encroaching on me this semester. I swear I'll get it under control someday!
It was so nice of you to review this for me, and it truly did make a bad day so much better. ♥ I'm happy you enjoyed it, too! The prompt I received for this was too perfect for the sort of story I had in mind, and Percy is so underloved. I feel like more people should write about him; there is a severe shortage of Percy-centric stories out there. And people give him a lot of grief, too, but there WAS a lot resting on his shoulders. Speaking as someone with two sisters my age, it's not always easy to move beyond the association of being a triplet, and Percy probably felt much the same about being lumped under the Weasley umbrella. I'm more like Percy than any other canon character; I sympathize with him greatly.
He has a really heroic arc, too -- ascension to greatness, fall from grace, asking for forgiveness. Maybe heroic isn't the word I'm looking for, but it's something played out across the pages of other books besides Harry Potter. Was he a git? Absolutely. But he was a very human git, and he should get some credit for that.
I'm glad you liked the narrative style, too. :) One-shots are often my ways of experimenting with writing in a way that writing novels can't provide. There's less emphasis on continuing and keeping up a story and that leads me to focus more on the language itself, which is lovely.
Anyway! ♥ I'm grinning like mad just reading this again. You've no idea how much this meant to me, or that you were willing to do this FOR me. I'm lucky to count you among my friends!