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Review:patronus_charm says:
I saw that the next chapter of this was 75% completed, so thatís more motivation to finish this, and the fact I get the 190th review :D

It was nice to see more of Edeline in this chapter, as we hadnít really had that much insight into her thoughts during the story so far, so I really enjoyed reading this. It was strange to see that even though she was pushing her child to get married, that she still sensed some sadness about his departure, but I guess that would only be natural about your only child leaving home, and I liked that she had a caring nature to her, as it made her a warmer person in my eyes.

It was also sweet to her reminiscing about her son when he was a baby, as it reminded you that he used to be one of the innocent, and how much he had changed from the baby to the grown man he had become. Vennís such a complex character; itís hard to imagine him as a child, as theyíre so simple in comparison.

I really liked the return to Hogwarts, as it was nice to see that it was still remarkably similar to how it is in the present day. I think it was due to the rebellious first years, and the house elves being there and it made you remember that it was still the same school.

When you mentioned the first years blowing up the dungeon, it made me think of the chamber of secrets, and low and behold thatís where Venn and Salazar are off to next! It was funny to see that Salazar thought that Venn could be swayed by beauty, but from what Iíve learnt so far of Venn, is that he is still quite a private man, so I donít think he would reveal anything like that.

I felt so proud of Venn when I saw his reaction to Salazarís plans. I got a little scared by how vindictive he was towards the muggleborn pupils, and I can see what you mean about him not being so nice now! It was very well done though, and it was nice to see how such a horrible thing began in context, as it made you realise how much planning must have gone into it.

I liked the talk Rowena and Helena had, as I had been getting a little worried about the impending marriage, but I think thatís just me being biased because I know what Helenaís fate is. It was nice to see that Rowena had the courage to challenge her daughter, and ask whether she was sure of this. I liked that there was some tension there, as it was great way to lead up to Helenaís final days, where she steals her motherís diadem!

I really liked the wedding plans in this chapter, and it was something more light hearted, in the relatively deep chapter, and it contrasted nicely. I really liked the sound of Helenaís dress, and I canít wait for the wedding scene, but Iím guessing itís a couple of chapters away, or perhaps it may not even happen? Either way, I need to know about the dress!

Another excellent chapter, and I canít wait to read on!

-Kiana :D

Author's Response: Yay, 190th review! I cannot believe I've gotten that many on this story. When I wrote it, I was convinced that no one would want to read it, since it's a Founders' story that doesn't even focus directly on the Founders themselves all the time. I'm happy the plot has pulled you in.

I sort of equate Edeline's distress about Venn growing up with a parent sending their kid off to college in our day and age. Your parents want you to get an education and have a nice job, but they're also sad to see you leave the nest. Venn isn't leaving, but his role is going to change dramatically after the wedding, and he won't really be Edeline's little boy anymore.

I really love the contrast between Salazar and Venn. At times, I wish Rowena could be privy to it, because I think she'd feel a little more comfortable about Venn marrying her daughter. Though Salazar has clearly been an important influence in his nephew's life, Venn is still his father's son. I envision the elder Selwyn to have been a more honorable man than Salazar.

As a parallel to Venn and his uncle, the tension between the Ravenclaw women is also growing. Helena is totally caught up in dreams of her fairytale wedding, and Rowena is trying to think about things logically and do what she can to intervene before it's too late. It's great that you admire Rowena's courage because I know that a lot of people really start to dislike her around this point in the story.

Thanks for another wonderful review :)

-Amanda

P.S. Chapter fourteen will be up in a week!


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