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Review:potterfan310 says:
I really like this chapter, because Lily's getting more mobile and I think she's met the people who will become her friends/boyfriend.

In the first part of this chapter, Lily seems to remind me of Tix from My Mad Fat Diary in the way she's questioned.

I have some CC for this chapter ~
"Everyone stares at me, eyes turning" - I think there was a change of tense here, stares needs to be stared.

"I snort, much to the surprise" - Same here, snort needs to be snorted.

"I digress. Seriously" - I think this is meant to be disagree.

"hair in two plaits by her" - This could just be me but it might make more sense if it was 'down' not 'by' otherwise it could be indicated that her plaits were floating by her shoulders.

"as Luna and her husband Roy" - I'm a canon freak at times, Luna's husband is Rolf :)

"he suddenly leapt across the table until his nose was against mine." - I really love this line. I'm not sure why but I do.

I think it's either going to be the crazy one who jumped at Lily or the boy with black hair will be the one she falls in love with. Hoping it's the crazy one though :)

Glad we got to see more of Lily in this chapter and I hope she is able to get out more in the chapters to come.

-Potterfan310
Soph xx

Author's Response: Thank you. One of my problems is that I have a habit of changing tense, the only thing Word doesn't notice. Can't believe I put Roy, I've always thought of Luna with Rolf and Neville with Hannah (Abbott). It's wonderful to know what you think is going to happen, thank you for still reading and reviewing!

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