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Review:patronus_charm says:
I forgot that Darcy and Albus were meant to be going on a date, so when I saw that she was waiting in a restaurant, it suddenly clicked in my brain, and I got really excited, aw those two :’)

It was really sweet to see Darcy so nervous, as she usually appears rather cool and collected, so you wouldn’t really expect her to be, but I’m guessing it was probably due to a certain someone she was having dinner with. It was also nice to learn a bit more about where/how she worked, I know it was only a little line, but it meant she became more of a person to me, but knowing that fact.

I got a little worried at the beginning of the date, and I think it was due to the description of the food, as that seemed to be mimicking their thoughts, and seemed as if that was more interesting than one another. It was nice that they started to talk, and you could see that Albus was trying to be perceptive with his mentions about her work, and how she worked.

It was interesting to learn more about Albus’ work history, as it did always intrigue me why someone like him, would end up being an agent for some models. It was nice to see the mention from Hermione; of course she would give him such practical advice. I liked that you made him indecisve, as his parents always seemed to know what they were doing, and it was nice to see that this wasn’t the case with him, as it showed we weren’t carbon copies of them.

Ok so Albus made them share the bill, and then asked her for a walk. If he’s going to do that, he should have offered to pay for the whole thing! It was nice to see them though, as we got to learn more about Darcy’s character, through what she did, and why she worked at WW, as it makes her more identifiable.

Aw and then she asked him whether he had a girlfriend or not! And he said no, with a little smile, he’s too cute! And I was getting all excited with Darcy about a possible kiss, then Albus had to go and crush my dreams! I didn’t realise it was for work, as I assumed it was a social thing as well, and it was pretty shocking to find that out! Then the forced smile, and calling her Miss Cresswell, it was so formal and awkward, and I just wanted to hide behind my laptop, due to the awkwardness!

It was a really great chapter, and I can’t wait to read the next and find out what’s going to happen with Albus and Darcy!

-Kiana :D

P.S. Thank you for the shout-out :D And the fluff was great ;D

Author's Response: I really don't want to fall into the trap of Darcy always being cool and confident and Albus always being awkward and nervous. I specifically tried to switch things up in this chapter, especially compared with the last one, so as to make both characters feel human and appropriately complex. It's great that the mix-up seemed interesting to you.

It's good that you're enjoying getting to know Albus. I've gotten a lot of comments that people like Darcy, Dominique, Rose, and Lily--and even James--but I feel like as much has not yet been said for Albus. There are so many versions of Albus walking around on the archive, and so please don't hesitate to let me know how he compares to others you've seen, what you like, and what doesn't seem to fit.

I'm happy that the flow of the date convinced you that it was truly a social outing :) It was definitely a shock to Darcy to find out that she had gotten so nervous over a work outing. Her confidence is probably a bit dinged up, and Albus will need to work to win her back.

Thanks for another lovely review, Kiana! Next chapter will be up, as usual, next Sunday.

-Amanda

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