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Review:nott theodore says:
Wow. I feel like James' character has advanced and developed a lot in this chapter, and it was good to see. I loved some of the characters you brought back this chapter, especially Audrey, she's one of my favourites!

It's good to see James really trying to find out more about the illness and prepare himself for any future he might have with Carla, and I thought you wrote the conversation with Mark and Ingrid really well. I think you definitely helped us to understand much more about Carla's feelings, even though she wasn't in this chapter. I also thought the talk with James and Harry was really sweet, and it's so good to see their relationship improving and them becoming closer.
I never guessed that Ingrid had gone to see Lily about James and Carla! But it would be good to see Lily again, I do miss her character.

And you wrote in your reply to my last review that you're writing a sequel to this story! I can't tell you how excited that made me! Anyway, yet another great chapter and I hope you update soon because I'm looking forward to it!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: James has grown up a lot recently. He's not changed, necessarily, but he HAS matured and become much more sensible in how he goes about things. Which is a good thing given the situation he finds himself in! It was nice to throw Audrey back in, because she's not been around much in a while and her role as a Healer is hugely important here.

Ingrid and her fellow were created for a reason! This conversation was also inspired by the film, actually - when I watched it I was struck by the old man who basically wished he'd had the chance to back out, and while the roles may have been reversed here in that it was the actual sufferer who was telling James not to get involved, I still wanted his resolve to be tested by SOMEONE telling him the complete opposite of what he wanted to hear.

When I first wrote those chapters I felt certain that people would realise that Ingrid had somehow been involved in getting Carlotta to visit James, given that her conversation with him was only in the previous chapter! Maybe that was just because I knew that was the case, so to me it was obvious. :) But yes, Ingrid orchestrated that little trick. Lily will crop up again soon, once the immediate Carlotta plot-thread is dealt with. :)

Glad you're excited for the sequel! It's a bit different to Rails, but a couple of the main themes from here will be carried across. Thanks for reviewing!


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