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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi Val!

This was a really powerful chapter. I have to say that I really like Simon's sections the best so far. They are so powerful and so painfully real. I can't imagine those being anything close to easy to write, so the way you are able to make them completely vivid and heart wrenching is really impressive.

I was thrilled that you explained the meanings of the triangles at the end. I was very close to googling it, hehe. Well, not hehe what they mean. Those are sad :(.

I am still trying to get the hang of keeping up with the rest of our clan, but I'm sure the more I read the more familiar I'll be with them. I really enjoyed seeing the little memory of Camille's, though. It gave her a new face; a new side that we weren't yet aware and took another huge step in making her real.

Jeans hardness towards his uncle makes me curious. I can't help but wonder if something happened or if his line of work has just taught him to be hard about nearly everything. For some reason I'm most interested in him and Johanna right now. I'm not sure why, haha. I'm also really interested in Camille too... you know, I actually just want to know more about them all. It looks like you're going to need to add another chapter quickly :P.

The part where Simon is able to stop his girls and talk to them was so moving. Oh gosh. I can't even imagine how badly that would hurt. To be so close but not be able to just take them and run off... Again, his sections really bring an amazing sense of realism to this.

The only thing I would suggest in terms of CC, is maybe giving us longer with each character? I'm still having a hard time keeping them completely straight in my head. I think because it's so many OC's with complex backgrounds...but still, that's not even a real CC because obviously we'll find more about them as the story goes on.

Another awesome chapter, m'dear ♥ I can't tell you how much I enjoy reading a story set in this time period. It's so original!

Jami

Author's Response: JAMI &hearts

Okay. This review. My response is, as often, an attempt at coherence.

Simon is incredibly difficult to write, mainly because I feel like I wouldn't be doing the people who actually went through this justice if I was too cold or too soppy (did that sentence even make sense?); and at the same time, I couldn't not write his scenes. You telling me they're well-written makes my heart go fuzzy!

Not every chapters includes all the characters, if ever, though there generally is a switch of point of view. Hopefully, it'll get less and less confusing as the story develops though, and the next chapter is very much focused on Astrid and Johanna.

Ah, Jean is an enigmatic person, isn't he? Of course, the circumstances have hardened him to pretty much everything, but there is another reason, which I won't mention here. The only thing I will say is that Jean is a brash and grudge-holding person, and that when he acts, it's for the people he loves. And now I will stop talking about this aspect of the story because I could write an essay about Jean...

The scenes with the Ziegler siblings are the only times ever that I'm near crying when I write. They're very much inspired from an amazing movie named 'The Round Up' by Roselyne Bosch, which I really recommend if you have time and a spare box of tissues.

ANYWAY. Thank you so much for your amazing review &hearts


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