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Review:ShadowRose says:
I'm back! :) Now, getting into the review.

I like how you've started each chapter with "you know life ain't normal when..." It really ties everything together and it's just cool, I guess.

Regulus is a really funny character. You can definitely see the similarities between him and Sirius, with the whole snarky attitude and smirking thing. I actually will admit that I laughed out loud with the whole "wifi" and "streaming episodes of Doctor Who" part.

I'm also really starting to like Ellie. You can see that this whole "seeing ghosts" thing is quite a nuisance to her, but she tries her best to work with it. She can also be quite sarcastic when she wants to. Overall, she's just a really good character.

On another note, THANK YOU for having Ellie refer to Ginny as "Mrs. P." Far too many next-gen fanfictions have the characters call her Ginny, and I'm over here like, "why have I never met a parent that's okay with that?"

Once again, you throw in some foreshadowing, and get me excited to see what's going to happen. Except now I don't have any more chapters to read... So update soon!

The science nerd in me got very excited with your use of "dihydrogen monoxide." I'm glad to know that I'm not the only person who refers to water by its chemical name in casual conversation. One little thing: the second time you wrote "monoxide," there was an extra "n." It's not a big deal; stuff like that happens to me all the time because I type faster than I think.

I actually had to re-read this chapter to try to find something to use as constructive criticism, but I really couldn't find anything. This chapter was extremely well-written.

Great job! I enjoyed reviewing these!

-ShadowRose

Author's Response: Those first lines are really hard to come up with sometimes! So I'm glad that they're working!

I really wanted to show the similarities between the two brothers, and I've always wanted to write Regulus this way. You always see him being mopey and angsty and a martyr, so I wanted to see what he'd be like if things were a little more normal.

Ellie will obviously be explored in more depth as the story progresses, as well as her "gift". You're right, of course, that it's annoying, and we should be able to see more of that later on. Good to hear that she's becoming more likeable!

It's too weird for me to reconcile the image of "Ginny" with "mother", so it made complete sense to me that she'd be Mrs P. And I have yet to meet a parent who was cool with that, too!

And I do hope to update soon! And I typo-ed monoxide? Gah! I think the pedantic science nerd inside just died a little. Thanks for pointing that out!

And I'm so flattered! Thanks for all the time and effort you put into these! I really appreciate it!


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