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Review:patronus_charm says:
Iíve missed Venn and Helena, so Iím glad to be back!

I liked seeing an emotional side to Rowena, she always seems rather cold towards her emotions in my mind, but it did seem really believable about how she reacted to what Salazar had become. It was nice to see some more of Witter as well, as I havenít seen much of him in the story so far.

So Helenaís facing some indecision regarding Venn then? I guess itís only natural after hearing what her parents said, and then how they both view the importance of magical blood very differently. I think my suspicion of Venn being the Bloody Baron earlier, is looking more and more likely to be right, and if it is, I think youíve done a great set up to show how it happened.

I liked the conversation between Salazar and Venn as well, as it again told us a lot more about the characters. Even though Salazar holds those extreme views, he still seems quite likeable to me, and he doesnít seem overtly annoying. Venn seems to be getting darker and darker though. The fixation he has with Helena, and his apparent need to marry her, is rather worrying, and again strengthens my belief in him being the Bloody Baron.

It strange how so much has changed, yet the marriage of Cepheus and Priscilla was still rather similar to that of Bill and Fleur!

I liked that scene at the end; it was lovely to have some Venn and Helena moments, even if Venn is starting to worry me. It was a bit of twist to see that he admitted that he was wrong, but then Venn does like to surprise us like that, and if he loves Helena as much as he proclaims, it would be natural that he did. Helena though was wonderful, and the way she made him apologise first, fitted her so well!

Another excellent chapter!

-Kiana :D

Author's Response: Hi again, Kiana!

It's lovely to hear that you liked seeing Rowena become a little unhinged. It has been difficult for some readers to reconcile this change with her normally logical persona, and I was a little worried that I'd pushed the inconsistency in her characterization too far. I felt like it would be a powerful image to see her breaking down and weeping because there's no logical way to handle her daughter.

Yes, Helena isn't quite sure what to do about Venn. She still feels attracted to him, but it's tough for her to shake the immature, selfish way he behaved at the joust. She also doesn't know what to do with the fact that her mother doesn't seem to like him much, and yet she wants Helena to go ahead and tie the knot with someone, meaning that at this point she might have to start over with another suitor. It's a difficult position for Helena to be in.

I think you'll find that Salazar is less and less likeable as the story continues, and perhaps that will be true for Rowena as well. As for Venn's dangerous fixation--hold that thought. I'm happy you can see how someone with that kind of determination could be quite scary.

I really hope it's coming through with each successive chapter that I don't want people to make final decisions about Team Venn versus Team Helena so far. People logically enter the story thinking about poor Helena and her terrible fate, but it seems like I've inspired some pity and affection for Venn here, too. My goal is that by the end, you'll have seen the light and dark side of both of our young lovers.

Thanks for another wonderful review :)

-Amanda


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