|Review:||nott theodore says:|
I loved this chapter! I don't think you have too many new characters at all, because we've not had many so far, really. Poor Madison, having to deal with not only James (in her opinion, not mine! I'm a big James fan at the moment!) but also Garrett Goldstein. He really was creepy!
I'm so glad you didn't put James and Madison together as potions partners! There are so many stories that have two people being assigned together for a project and then as a result they fall in love...don't get me wrong, some of them do it really well, but it can be quite cliche and I'm glad you resisted any temptation you might have felt to do it here! I think Fred could be a fun character to read more, too. I wonder if he'll manage to get through the year without blowing something up in Potions?
I noticed one mistake in this chapter - you talk about the 'idioms' that Madison keeps thinking of, and I think you mean euphemisms, or innuendos. Doesn't make much difference, but I thought I'd point it out anyway, sorry!
I liked the development of the characters we already know here, too. Particularly the fact that Madison clearly fancies James and just won't admit it to herself, probably because she thinks that he doesn't actually care about her (oh dear, now I'm psychoanalysing fictional characters. I really should go to bed. Or work on the essay I'm procrastinating...) so it's going to be interesting to see how their relationship develops!
I know this story was only just updated, but I hope you update again soon, because I really do love this story already! Hence me reading and reviewing each chapter in the early morning when I really should be in bed asleep *self-congratulatory pat on the back*. Anyway, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!
nott theodore :)
Author's Response: Yeah, Garrett's a creep, but he sure was fun to write! The James of the past was probably a whole lot more annoying, but he's definitely a better person so far this year.
While the whole Potions partners thing is always a good idea because it forces them to interact, I agree that it has been far too overused in fanfiction. Plus, this gives her an opportunity to get to know Fred. And yeah, if he's anything like his namesake, I don't imagine he's ever made it through a year of Potions without intentionally exploding something.
Gah, you're right. "Euphenisms" was a much better choice. When I finally get the CI in for this chapter, I'll make sure to fix that too. Thanks!
Madison is very confused about her emotions, to say the least. And it's okay, I psychoanalyze them too...
I will update as soon as I get this next chapter pieced together... Right now it's in chunks.
Thanks for the review, again!