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Review:ScarletEye158 says:
Wow. That is literally all I can say. Let me go compose myself before I actually start to review this!

Okay, I'm back!

This story really hit home for me. I'm currently going through a similar situation but I don't really understand why I'm putting myself through it...

You did a really good job with characterizing Lily. She seemed a little wishy washy and unsure about everything but that made her very relate able. It's a lot easier to relate to somebody who's confused and going through a hard time rather than someone who is unbelievably strong and sure of themselves because a lot of people AREN'T sure of themselves. People have a lot of weaknesses and this OC is definitely Lily's.

I can already tell you, even though I don't know him, that I hate him. Anyone who leaves, comes back when he feels like it, messes around with other people and eventually leaves again doesn't deserve to be with someone who has so much love to give. And the fact that Lily acknowledges herself as his 'plaything' makes me really sad because she downgrades herself into something far less than she is.

I loved the way you wrote this too by the way. The short sentences, sometimes one word sentences added a lot even though they didn't say much. It showed just how choppy and lonely her thoughts were. Whoever this guy is he had a lot of control over her.

The flow of this was really nice and I didn't really find anything grammatically incorrect or awkward. You really did this type of story/topic justice and I'm really glad I read it.

Definitely one to add to the favorites! < 3


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