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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey there!

Oh dear, such a painful little piece to read. Though this was short, I think you managed to express George's pain very well through your narrative.

I liked the sort of unconnected sentences sometimes which showed just how broken George was and expressed the depth of his pain. The part about him covering all the mirrors in his house because he couldn't bear to look at his own reflection touched me deeply and I almost want to cry now!

My favourite quote has to be this: "He was sinking without Fred; he needed him to keep afloat." It truly showed just how much George needed his twin brother and was such a powerful sentence. I also like the concept of George dreaming of "paradise" where he was at peace.

All in all, I think you really managed to do justice to George's loss and pain, and showed it powerfully with your descriptions. I was engrossed in reading this and the emotions really stood out to me. The only small CC (if you can call it that) I'd give you is that perhaps you should break the big chunks of paragraphs into smaller ones? That'd make for a smoother read.

Besides that, great great job! 10/10

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

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