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Review:adluvshp says:
Oh my merlin. Another beautiful and heartbreaking piece of writing! Really, you're such an amazing writer Giola, it is really a pleasure to read your stories =)

First off, I loved how you wrote this! I usually have a hard time understanding second person narratives, always get confused somehow, but this was so clearly written that I had no confusion at all, so good job! I think it is a big feat to manage to write second person as well as you did, and also not make any tense mistakes in the process, so I am really impressed.

In this brilliant one-shot too, your descriptions and imagery was incredible. I am floored by your talent. The beginning was just so beautiful, and I could almost see a little girl flash in front of my eyes surrounded by pink flowers she'd conjured. As always, your imagery was so good! I liked how Fleur compared her to Victoire briefly here and there, as that gave us a little more insight into Dom. I liked how Fleur envisioned Dominique's future and wanted to watch her grow up, it was all so sweet and touching.

And then BAM! You realize Fleur is not completely sane and it is the past she's remembering, and it just broke my heart to see her state. I should have expected something of the sort from the title, but I didn't know the meaning, and I only googled the title after reading the one-shot, so yeah xP Anyway, the part where Fleur is not able to recognize her grown-up daughter and thinking that she's still eleven, was written just so powerfully and my heart just clenched painfully on reading that segment. The adult Dominique leaving a pink flower with her mother was the sweetest and most touching thing ever and I didn't know whether to smile or cry at that point. It kind of reminded me of Neville and the toffee wrappers (here it was the other way round though).

And then in the end when Fleur goes back in her memory, it made me all the more sad that Fleur wants to be there for Dom as she grows up, when in fact her daughter is grown up already and she doesn't remember anything at all. It was just all too painful, yet so so beautifully written.

This was a short piece but there were so many emotions packed in this and I am really really impressed by your writing of this, and it was just amazing, and I don't know what else to say except for WOW!

There was one tiny typo I noticed though, here:
"She grow up, blossoming into the beautiful woman you knew she would become." I believe it should be "She'd grow up...".

Apart from that, this was a perfectly written flawless piece of writing. I loved it to the core. Great job!

10/10

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

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