|Review:||Gabriella Hunter says:|
Hey there, its Gabbie here with your requested review and all that jazz. I would have reviewed this yesterday but I was busy doing stuff and walking around my house like a zombie.
Anyhoo, on to this! I really, really love this idea, I haven't read too many stories centered on the 'beyond' as I would like to call it. Then again, Teh Tarik's lovely, "Other side of Glass" is a good one too but anyway, I really enjoyed this. Opening of course with James instead of Lily was a great change too, usually people tend to go from her POV.
With James I always figured he would be a harder character to write because even with what I knew from the books he was still sort of a mystery. I think you capture so much of his character in this though that its so believable and I loved the first reactions that he had of being gone.
The confusion that was there and his brief moments of not recalling what had happened before the green light was really powerful. To me at least it just added all the right tension, so by the time he's freaking out and realizing what's happening, I was pretty much hanging on every word.
To have him weakening up and crying was really wonderful too. It made him seem all the more real to me and I'm glad that you allowed him that moment with himself too. If he'd been so calm and controlled i don't think it would have flowed well and plus, being surrounded by nothing but white fog would drive anyone mad!
I liked the description of the 'beyond' too, it was simple but it was enough to picture in my mind and I thought it was really unique. :D
So, anyway, the rest of this with Lily just about broke me into pieces. I'm a wuss and so I had to pause for a little while as the two of them talked and pieced together what had happened.
Actually, I think I pretty much cried with James was talking about holding Harry again. Yeah, that turned me into a puddle of tears. T-T
But anyway, Lily was sort of a calming thing for James, even though they were both upset and I got a sense of how their relationship was.
What made me really sad though, aside from all of that was what they said about Neville. We all know that Harry won't be with the Longbottoms but their hope that he would grow up with their friends and have a normal life was just so painful.
And poor Frank and Alice! D':
Phew! But anyway, I loved that ending and James's thoughts as he and Lily settled down in the 'waiting room' until they were needed again. Lovely writing you know! :D
I know you said that you were concerned if this was able to be followed all right and I think it is. It didn't stray at all from what you were trying to say and your writing is as amazing and gripping as always. :D
So...no CC's! :D
Thanks for the amazing read!
Author's Response: Hi, Gabbie! So you might be in the army by now, and I'm *so* sorry that I took so long to reply to this.
Ive had a couple of people compare this to teh tarik's story, and I really loved the other thing I've read by him/her, so I should check it out. I don't think I could have done nearly as much justice to Lily's PoV. She's a bit enigmatic to me. James, on the other hand, I felt really comfortable with where I thought he was coming from in this. The confusion followed by the overwhelming sense of grief and failure he must have felt. I didn't see any chance that he was going to be able to take this all in stride. That wouldn't have made any sense.
Everything that happened after Lily's arrival was pretty hard to write. There were so many strong emotions that came out when I tried to think through what they could have known at this point and how they would have expected Harry's life to play out. Lily is James's rock, I think, much more than his friends ever realize. He's willing to drop the "James Potter Manly Facade" and open up to her unconditionally.
The idea that they would have expected Frank and Alice to raise Harry came to me rather late in the process of writing this, but it made all the sense in the world. After Lily's disastrous attempt to introduce James to Petunia and Vernon, I expect that those two would have been very low on her list of preferred adoptive parents for Harry.
I'm really glad that it all flowed well for you. I was really concerned about that.
Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review! Take care and I hope to see you back again really soon!