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Review:Remus says:
Heya! I saw Dan recommending this fic some time ago and now with the Gryffindor v Slytherin thing going on...I've taken this as an opportunity to come read it!

I usually read and review at the same time. However, with Ron being one of my favorite characters in the series, I felt immediately sucked into the story and didn't review as I usually do.

His monologue about how amazingly good looking he is and his trouble with Lav-Lav is done amazingly well. You had me rolling my eyes along with Hermione and laughing with Harry about poor Ron's predicament. What I like about the way you wrote this was how well you painted the picture in my head without over explaining things. Writing in first POV is difficult and some people over-do details so its always nice to see when an author seems to get it right.

Lavender is a piece of work though. She was a bit crazy in the books...you managed to make her insane and a bit stalker-ish. Seriously, I had an image of crazy Lav-Lav hoovering outside the Gryffindor's boy dormitory, just watching Ron sleeping or talking to Harry. All while wearing a creepy smile.

Harry tells me not to discourage her because it amuses him to watch.---That has got to be one of my favorite lines. Because as horrible as Harry's life was, he still enjoyed school...thanks to moments like these.

Ron felt so in character. Of course he has a big head about the whole Lavender thing, but he's still denying his feelings for Hermione. He even gets a bit jealous about Harry and Hermione and he doesn't even know it.

Anyway! This was an amazing one-shot! Thanks for the laugh!!! I'm adding this to my faves now! :)

--Rosie

Author's Response: Hi, Rosie!

Lavender and her creepy smile was a blast to write. I almost always write in third person, so it surprised me when I sat down to write this and it ended up being in first; but there's something about first person that lets you inside the character's head more than other POVs do. Ron's thoughts kept flicking to Hermione, even when he wasn't totally sure why, which I enjoyed doing because Romione is my absolute favorite HP ship.

I'm so happy you thought Ron was in character! Things got a bit absurd in this one-shot, with Lavender trying to lick his hand and Ron strutting around, so I had to remind myself to reel it back quite often.

Thank you for reading and reviewing. :)

- Sarah


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