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Review:potterfan310 says:
I've been meaning to review this for a few days but haven't got around to it until now.

I LOVE reading teen pregnancy and James/OC stories so a big plus for you and I haven't even read it yet.

I really like your OC Ava, she seems like a strong character who won't let anything stop her.

I feel like the end part of the flasback was a little rushed, perhaps explain how/where she got the muggle pregnancy test from because it seems like it just appeared out of thin air.

Pehaps add a page break or a few lines (-) between Dom telling Ava she'll see her in the common room and when Ava is looking at her stomach to imply that time has passed.

"I sighed and sagged" - This didn't make a lot of sense but that could just be me.

Overall I really like this story and your OC Ava. She's slightly insane in a good way as well as being pretty adorable and loveable. I'm excited to see where her and James will go once he finds out she's pregnant.

A really good start!!! Deffinitely adding to my favs :)
-Potterfan310
Soph xx

Author's Response: Aww, thank you sosososo much! This review made my day!

I'm glad you like Ava, I think she'll be really fun to write and I LOVE writing characters like her.

I feel like the flashback was a little rushed too, but I'm going to get a few more chapters up then edit them, just so I can see where this story's going and then go over it with a fine-tooth comb.

There might be some parts that don't make sense - I think I was half-asleep when I wrote some of it, so I'll be going over it and fixing things, as I said.

I'm so glad you liked it! Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon x


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