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Review:AC_rules says:
Hello there Kiana!

It's been quite a long time since I've read any Remus/Tonks (in fact, I think I've only read or two even with that), so I'm really looking forwards to see how this pans out!

I really liked the idea of looking into the birth of the Order, actually, as it's a time that I've always been intrigued about... and Tonks is such an interesting character. I'd really like to hear more about her relationship with her mother/her wider family and how she feels about that, especially if she was talking to Sirius about it (that conversation is so overdue - it would be nice for Sirius to be re-reminded that not everyone he's related to are absolutely horrridible).

One thing I noticed is that you often start your sentences with 'I' - if you scroll down the side of the page, about every other paragraph starts with I. Whilst there's nothing wrong with doing that, it makes things sound slightly repetitive. I know it's a pain with third person, but maybe just try to be more aware of that?

It doesn't look like Remus has made much of an impression yet, so I'm really excited to see where you go on with this. Tonks is such an interesting character :)


Author's Response: Hello there AC!

I think I've only ever read a Remus/Tonks one-shot, and I really loved it, so I felt the need to write a novella about them, so I hope it works out well, as I don't have much experience with them!

I liked the birth of the Order as well, as it was something that always interested me, so I wanted to the start the story there, so I'm glad that you liked it.

Yes Tonks is a very interesting charatcer, I think that's why I decided to write it from her POV! Her family should feature in the next chapter or the one after, as I was found it interesting, given the fact her pureblood mother ran off with a muggleborn man!

I know what you mean about Sirius! I feel so bad for him, so I need Sirius to see that he is loved, and isn't alone, as that's one of the thing that saddens me the most!

I didn't notice my use of I's! I'll definitely go back, and change it, as I would hate for it to be repetitive! So thank you for pointing that out :D

Thank you for this great review, it made me smile!

-Kiana :D

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