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Review:potterfan310 says:
Hello, I'm here from the review battle.

I love James/OC stories and I was intrigued when I found this.

"apparently the" - Think you missed a 'y' on the.

I realise that Emily has grown up in America but if her mum was British would she want to be called mum not mom. It might just be me britpicking but it may make sense if her mother wants to keep to her British heritage, if you get me.

This is really good and the way you write her kaes her seem more real. It's like her thoughts are actually playing everything that happened rather than just me reading them.

I really like you're characterisation of James, he's like his namesakes in some ways and he's cocky. But on the otherhand he seems gentleman like, what with offering to help with her trunk.

I was really surprised to see that Lavender was her mother. I though it would have been someone like Katie Bell or Cho Chang.

I like you're OC Emily's personality and that she was dreading about going to Hogwarts and the bit about the robes made her seem more real.

I'm really curious about the accident with her sister and am looking forward to reading the next chapter :)

-Potterfan310
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