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Review:Athene Goodstrength says:
Ahh, so she was Miss Potter from the start. I thought ‘Potter’ might have been her married name. Not Harry’s grandmother then!

I really enjoyed this chapter. You’ve really done an amazing job of rooting it in a certain place and time. Your historical context is really spot-on, which is again something I don’t think I’ve seen much on HPFF. All the rumours and beliefs surrounding the origins and transmission of the pox feel so realistic, I guess as they’re very much something we’ve seen throughout British history, from the plague to the Spanish ‘flu (which I noticed you mention here - I guess it might have killed magical people too...) The suspicion that the French may be passing it on to the UK on purpose made me giggle, and it’s another recognisable British reflex! The apothecary’s bigoted view was reminiscent to me of the belief in the 80’s that only gay men could spread AIDS.

It’s also clear that you’ve got a personal, family history really clearly mapped out for these Potters and I absolutely love it. I’m always fascinated by family dynamics, and you’ve got lots of juicy hints and relationships going on here. Caterina reminds me a bit or Ariana Dumbledore, frail and sort of ethereal and being taken care of by older siblings. This line particularly struck me: “ Their father had steadily deteriorated in worth as a father since their motherʼs death.

Your development of Diana’s character feels natural and unforced whilst being really interesting - particularly the fact that she has visions! She seems to carry a large burden on her shoulders.

I really hope you carry on with this story, it’s really, really good so far.

Athene xo

Author's Response: Yep! She's a relative of Harry's, but a fairly distant one - James's father was her cousin. They were not close in age and barely knew each other. I liked the idea of trying to build up something more about Harry's family, though.

I'm glad you liked the historical context! I love history, and I've always been really interested in medicine (especially epidemics), so I've done a fair amount of research into the subject - I'm really glad it came through!

I'm so sorry it took me so long to respond to this. I really appreciate the review, and I'll definitely be continuing the story when I have the space to breathe.


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