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Review:Athene Goodstrength says:
This story called out to me from your Authorís Page - what an interesting idea for a story! Iím presuming that Diana is Harryís grandmother. Itís a good name for a witch, they often have goddess-y names.

This prologue is short but sweet, and it introduces so many ideas and questions and your language brings up really vivid imagery. Who else did Diana lose? What has she been doing to try and help? I love it when I have questions when reading a story (particularly if theyíre answered later on). It all reminds me of the Spanish Flu after the first World War, in the way it spread quickly across Europe and killed mostly young people.

Itís so sad that at 10 years old (80 years before the story opens - such a long time to live with that sort of sadness) she already knows the ravages of the disease.

You introduce an interesting dynamic in the relationship with the father - Diana seems to have gone through a period of blaming him for the death of the sister.

My only criticism is that the line ďMy brother Charlus whispers to me, when our father is otherwise occupied, that he is bitter and angry and terrified of losing our mother. Ē is a little ambiguous - I thought at first that Charlus was bitter and angry.

This is a really promising start to an interesting story - I havenít come across anything else like it on HPFF!

Athene xo

Author's Response: Spanish Flu is one of the most interesting epidemics in history, I think - that and smallpox always call out to me, so when I mapped out my idea of the Potter family tree, I definitely used both of those and dragon pox as common causes of death.

I'm really glad you enjoyed this, and thanks for your suggestion re: that line - I'll definitely go through and change it.

Thank you so much for such a lovely and helpful review!


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