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Review:MissMdsty says:
Hello there! I'm here with your requested review!

I love NextGen but I've never really read a story that focuses on Lily Potter (II). I guess it's because the Marauder Era is one of my favorite in fanfiction and I just can't see a Lily without a James (that isn't her brother, that is.).

I like how the main OC here is Muggle. I think it's going to make for a very interesting story. I couldn't find any spelling or grammar mistakes, although, I have one thing I feel the need to point out.

Neil has known Lily for what, 12 hours? And he already thinks she is an amazing angel and all that. You have to be careful with character development, because NextGen characters are mainly OCs because we know nothing of them. You don't want Harry Potter's daughter to turn into a Mary-Sue!

Good luck with this story!

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for you review.
I know what you mean with you comment about Neil, it's something I'm struggling with too. I really think I want to much to happen in too short a time.

I definately don't want Lily to be a Mary-Sue, that was never my intention, she should be unique and something amazing but a bit strange all the same.

Do you have a suggetion how to change the beginning so it makes for a better start of the story?

I thought it would be an interesting view to write from a muggles perspective, since you can make them discover everything about the magical world, but it turns out to be a bit harder then I thought.
Any tips are extremely welcome!

thanks for your review and I hope to hear from you if you have tips.
Maya


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