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Review:MissMdsty says:
Hello dear!

Marauder stories are the best! There's so much to write about these boys and their time in school!

I like how you incorporated in this first chapter bits and pieces from their past and their history, like Lupin's furry little problem and Sirius' fight with his mother. It gives the characters backgrounds and makes them more real for the reader. I also like how you mentioned other characters that they were friends with but weren't part of the group, like Frank and Alice.

All in all, it was a good chapter, though I did notice some small spelling errors that I'd like to point out:

"in to animagus" - it should be "into Animagi"; you also spelled into as two separate words in the next sentence.

You should also try to put a punctuation mark at the end of the dialogue, either a coma or a period. I noticed you only do that for the dialogue sections that end in a question mark or exclamation mark. All dialogue sentences should end in some kind of punctuation mark.

Good job on this first chapter and good luck with the story!

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