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Review:fauxthefox says:
I've always wanted to read about a portrait! :D

Phineas seems very Phineas, which I appreciate. He's snarky and lazy as he is in the novels, but you've also given a good sense of the psychology behind the sass, if you will. :) It's interesting that he mirrors Sirius in that they're both trapped/restless.

I think Dumbledore must be a difficult character to write (I'm too scared to try). His dialogue in this chapter seems almost a bit too proper. I suggest this to literally everyone I leave a review for and it might be getting old - but I think it really helps if you read your characters' lines aloud. That way you can actually hear each line and detect any awkward/unnatural phrasing.

So original! I love it.
10/10
Faux

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

I am glad you liked Phineas' characterisation and liked the analogy with Sirius.

Yes, Dumbledore is way too difficut to write and I was really wary of writing the few dialogues I did, so I'll try to make his lines fit in better with canon. Thanks for the tip, and the review, and the 10/10!

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