Yay, Iíve nearly caught up with this story :D
I really liked the first paragraph of this chapter. There was something about, which just seemed to show the desperate situation war causes, and how simples amenities, which we think nothing off, mean so much to them. I really liked how you captured Choís happiness of getting that package, as you could see how much it would mean to her, and you could sense that she was happy for the patients as well.
This line from Cedric, was just great - ďNo,Ē Cedric wrote, pulling the tray closer to him. ďHave lunch with me.Ē It just made me aw so much, as it was just so spontaneous and unexpected, and that was reflected in Choís reaction to the question. I really liked their conversation that followed, you can see that their building up trust in each other, and growing to like each other. The way you said that Cedric was bored, reflected well with the first chapter, where you talked about how energetic he was.
I really liked that you included Andre and Fjodor for two reasons really. First of all, it made the hospital setting more realistic by having foreign patients there, as it does seem likely that they would share hospitals. Secondly, I think it creates a new dynamic, due to them being Ďexoticí, and it allows the reader to see whether their perspective of the war differs from Cedricís.
I really liked the last line here, as it shows how much war bonds people in ways they could have never have anticipated beforehand. I donít think when Cedric chose to take Muggle Studies, that he would be using it, so he could play cards in a war hospital, but then again it reinforces the unpredictability of the whole situation of it.
Iíll hopefully be able to read and review chapter five, and then Iím all caught up :D It was another excellent chapter though!
Author's Response: Yeah, I bet a package with the stuff they got in it would be a real treasure in this time. It's like when you've gone without groceries for a couple of weeks and come home with enough to fill your cabinets and refrigerator.
I love my Cedric/Cho fluff. I've become much more comfortable with writing fluff in general compared to how I used to be. It's nice to be able to go to the lighter side even with the angsty, dramatic backdrop of the war. You're right that they're enjoying getting to know one another and making the best of their shared confinement, of sorts, in the abbey.
It's great that you liked Cedric's new friends! It was neat to think about ally soldiers from different lands coming together in recovery and swapping stories of back home and out on the front. Andre and Fjodor don't have big roles in this story, but I liked the image of them playing cards with a bored Cedric.
Thanks for another really lovely review :)