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Review:adluvshp says:
Hi there!

Wow, this was a nice story indeed. Usually, Task one challenge stories tend to be a little repetitive due to the prompts, but I was pleased that you incorporated all the prompts well, and yet managed to make your story unique.

I liked that you picked this certain moment of Ginny, Neville, and Luna breaking in Snape's office to centre your story around.

The way they did it almost seemed to easy though, I'd have perhaps liked to see more action. Also, you had a couple of missing/misplaced commas and periods. For instance, a lot of your dialogues did not end with a period/comma which is not grammatically correct (as far as I know). So, I'd suggest giving this a thorough re-read and fixing them, or getting a beta.

Those are the only CCs I had for you. Apart from that, I think you wrote this brilliantly. I felt that Neville, Luna, and Ginny were all very in character. I loved the explanation of why Luna carried a Sleeping Draught with her, it made me chuckle. I also liked how Neville was very nervous about the whole ordeal throughout but managed to gather his courage. That was all nicely shown. I also liked the note you ended the piece with. Good work =)


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