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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hey! I thought this was a really good chapter, and I actually reckon your writing is improving loads-we also found out a lot more information and were introduced to some important characters, which was great.

I liked the conversation between Flick and Albus. It was definitely sufficiently awkward, and I'm actually glad Flick hasn't told Albus the babies are his yet, because that should make for some very interesting drama in the following chapters...looking forward to it!

I actually really like Ria's character. You have done a really good job developing her personality, and her reaction when Flick told her what she'd said to Albus was great. I also like Dom-well, what we've seen of her, anyway. She seems like that classic, slightly crazy best friend, and I can't wait to see more of she and Flick together.

If I have one criticism for this chapter, it's that the whole flashback seemed a little unrealistic. In saying that, that could just be my taste. Flick's ex-best friend just seemed a little bit too catty and it seems like Flick and Albus were awfully young when they got together and first slept together-they must have been only 12 or 13? Again, it could just be me, but that seems a little un-Hogwarts. However, apart from this, I think this chapter was great, and I hope you don't think I sound too harsh!

Good writing,
Courtney:)

Author's Response: Thank you!!! :)


Oh there are many awkward moments to come between Al and Flick. As well as lots and lots of drama and quite a few things you won't have seen coming :D

Ria's over protective since she's the oldest and she had to like mum for the past few years, she's just looking out for Flick :)

There are reason's Rory is slightly catty towards Flick, although I don't think she should use it as an excuse.

Al and Flick got together when he was 14 and she was 13 (nearly 14). They were both 16 when they first slept together.

You weren't harsh at all :) although I do understand where you're coming from about it being un-Hogwarts ish.

Thank you again!
-Potterfan310
Soph xx

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