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Review:fauxthefox says:
I was really curious when I saw this story, because it's a scene I've always wondered about. :) On to the CC -

One thing that I think the chapter could use is a bit more description. I have trouble with it myself, but it helps me to try to think from the character's pov - what he/she might notice during all the action.

All of the characters are nicely in order and seem to fit the canon pretty well, so points for that! Your dialogue is mostly well written, but Luna's seems a bit awkward in places. Reading dialogue out loud always helps me, so I suggest that if you'd like to edit, you go over Luna's lines out loud.

Great chapter. I'm always impressed when people can capture a lot of feeling and action in a one-shot. I think the scene has special significance because we know that Snape is Neville's greatest fear (at least as of his third year), and he manages to conquer it to try and get Harry his sword. A Gryffie through and through. :)

Faux

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