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Review:Athene Goodstrength says:
Well, wasn’t this just adorable?!

I feel like you really managed to capture a dynamic I feel to be quite important in Ron and Hermione’s relationship.
Hermione is often seen as the more capable of the two, in almost every way (except Quidditch). But in this one-shot you show us what Ron’s really good at - firstly, looking at a problem in a completely different way from other people, and secondly, relaxing! It’s an art Hermione might never quite master, but with Ron by her side she can learn some of it. They’re like ying and yang - she shows her love with organisation, he shows his with relaxation.

I really enjoyed the hurdles of being a pureblood/muggle-born wedding that you included in this. It helped to draw a contrast with Bill and Fleur’s wedding, which seemed to come together so perfectly (even if Molly was going nuts). I do feel sorry for Hermione; I think I’d be going crazy in that situation! Luckily I have a laidback boyfriend like Ron, who does things at his own pace (which probably drives Hermione as nuts as it does me) and reminds me to breathe.

Ron’s line about the garden at The Burrow, “it calms you, relaxes you, it's perfect” was absolutely perfect, because the way you wrote the first section, and Hermione slumping to the floor, just made me feel that it was her haven even before Ron said it!

I also adored the line about Molly and the catering! So perfectly characterized.

You really thought things through with Ron’s solutions to Hermione’s problems (got to love him pulling strings at the Ministry!), and that’s an attention to detail I enjoy in a story.

I only have one piece of criticism. The line, “We'll put a tent up and chairs for the guests, like Bill and Fleur” was a bit ambiguous and it confused me. I thought at first you meant guests like Bill and Fleur... it might be a bit clearer if you made it “like at Bill and Fleur’s wedding”.

Other than that, this story is really enjoyable - a lovely, thoughtful little story with lots of very good characterization.

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