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Review:marauder5 says:
Wow. This is my favorite chapter so far, and it's probably the best chapter I've read on this site. Everything about it was so incredible!

First of all, the painting thing - how incredibly creative of you, and how beautifully written. I love how you describe the colours "bleeding into her skin". It was really poetic and beautiful.

Also, Lily's love for Harry. I think you've portrayed it so, so well. She really becomes desperate because of how much he loves him, so much that she's willing to go through the races and watch her friends or someone else die. While I can't see the Lily Potter from the HP series doing something like that, your Lily Potter can. I guess after-life changed her, and the fact that she was separated from Harry.

Finally, the Snape part of this chapter. Everything about it was beautiful, and everything about it was perfectly written. You really portray his love for Lily in a perfect way, and the ending, binding it all together was probably what made this my favorite chapter: "I'm coming for you, my love."

It's a shame that you can't get this story published, because it's so great that it deserves to be a 'real' book. As ever, I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this story. I hope that you're proud of it and I hope you know what an amazing writer you are. If you're not writing professionally already, you should definitely consider doing it.

Author's Response: Oh, wow! Thank you! There's something about Snape chapters that make the tone a little more poetic than the others. I think he's one of JKR's biggest masterpieces, character-wise, because he's so complex and mysterious. I loved the opportunity of climbing into his head and seeing through his eyes. Alternatively, seeing through Lily's eyes as well and drawing comparisons to them really helped me highlight their different motivators. Severus devoted his life to the memory of Lily, and Lily is devoting her afterlife to the memory of Harry. Neither of them can truly move forward at this point because they're so attached to a world they don't belong to. But now that Severus has joined her in the afterlife, things could get complicated pretty fast. :3

Thank you so much for your lovely feedback! It would be nice in a way if this were original fiction instead of fan fiction, because I could get a wider audience for it, but it would lose so much of its magic - literally - if it were to be anything else. That and I love seeing reviews like this that I can respond to personally! I wouldn't have that if this were a real book. But I do write a lot of original fiction on the side and am hoping to be published someday. :)


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