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Review:fauxthefox says:
I'm so glad this review battle thing is going on because it introduces me to stories like this! I love this idea. Throwing in an LGBT character into the next-gen mix really brings the whole Potter universe up to the next level.

Lysander's situation is definitely interesting/engaging, and he's already a sympathetic character, because he's got so much going on in his head but he reigns it in, and doesn't really let people come close. I like Hugo and Teddy, too.

I think that one thing you could do with this chapter is go deeper. First off, with some more description to ground readers in the setting of the chapter. Second, with more detail about the individual characters, their personalities, and their connections to Lysander. Like I said, I really like Hugo, Teddy, Dom, and Lorcan - but at the moment their personalities aren't entirely distinguishable.

Great start! Off to the next chapter.
10/10
Faux

Author's Response: LGBT is always a good thing, I think. :D

Lorcan is in a very interesting situation and he really doesn't know what to do about it. He needs help, but he won't take it because he doesn't want people to know.

I'll be going back and editing this. :)

Thank you so much for leaving a review!

Sam.


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