|Review:||800 words of heaven says:|
Hello! Here with your requested review!
I am so glad that this is a Charlie chapter, because honestly, Tori scares the crap out of me, and I feel much more comfortable around Charlie.
So this chapter started a little differently, with that dream. Creepy, much? I think it begins to set the tone for the story really well. So far, we've only had a few glimpses that something really funky is going on, but this is sort of the first real foreshadowing of dark times. And I have to agree with Charlie, here. She most certainly doesn't think she's replacing Tori, and her behaviour should clearly indicate that, but for some reason, the entire Hogwarts student body is hell bent on believing this. I wonder why that is?
I think it's really sweet that Aine's being nice to Charlie. It seems as if she's the only one around genuinely interested in becoming her friend, which is a little sad, but whatever. I hope Aine is being genuine. I think she is, but I would hate it if they became friends and then she turned out to be the Devil's evil twin or something.
And is it significant to see Rebecca slip back into a bit of what we saw of her in the last chapter? I should feel bad, but I can't. I really don't like her.
And I feel Charlie's pain so much! I hate making that awkward small talk you have to as a new person anywhere. You somehow have to say enough to make them think you're okay, without giving them your life story. Ugh, it's so difficult making new friends! And I think she's absolutely adorable in this chapter. I'm so glad to have the pleasure to read a character so much like myself: awkward, and aware of it. But she's just so funny and witty, too. If she said half the things she thinks, she would be so endearing and I think people would enjoy how genuine she is. I know I would.
I felt like I should feel bad for Charlie when she finds out about Tori. But the thing was, that I couldn't. I didn't like Tori, and I knew she was missing, and quite frankly, if people just stopped freaking out about how the new girl was here to take Tori's place and just grieve her loss like normal people, everything would be hunky dory and Charlie could continue to be her awkward loveable self in relative peace.
And I like Fred, too. We met him in the last chapter, and Tori didn't like him, but I think it would be great to be around someone so positive. It might get a bit annoying when you just want to angst in peace, but I reckon most of the time, Fred would be a bucket of fun. I hope Charlie likes him, because that's one mark against Tori already - not liking Fred.
I just realised how much hate I'm throwing at your other character. Don't take it personally that I don't like her. I think she's still a great character because I hate her so much. She'll make for some interesting conflict and drama in this!
Oh my goodness. I think Hagrid's gone senile in his old age - he has to be like a hundred by now, at least. And I think I love him even more for it.
It's weird to think that James of all people doesn't want to be noticed. It makes sense considering his girlfriend or whatever is missing. And I think brooding and angst suit him. He's doing a great impression of young Anakin Skywalker at the moment!
Aww... I don't want the Potter boys to hate each other. It breaks my heart every time I think about Sirius and Regulus, and now you've gone and done this! But I am totally intrigued!
The twins are weird. They remind me of Gretchen Weiners from Mean Girls, but now there's two of them. This could be fun!
So more intrigue, and plot development, and awkward Charlie character development. Quite an eventful chapter, all in all! Looking forward to the next one!
Author's Response: HOW HAVE I NOT RESPONDED TO THIS BY NOW??? God, I am so, so, so, so, so, so, so, so, so, so (is that enough so's??) sorry! I have become so slack and I wish I had more time for fanfictioning these days!
Anyway thanks so much for the review, yours are always so amazing which makes me feel even worse for not replying sooner!
Oooh yes, the dream! And I will tell you that dark times are definitely ahead and that these dreams are just the beginning.
I'm really glad you're liking my characters, because they're really what make a great story a...great story! So ta!