So, I listened to the podcast of this story and couldn't help but come and read it too. I absolutely loved it! I have just one word for this amazing piece of writing which is WOW.
Your writing style is so unique and original, and it's something I have not come across before, so kudos for that. I liked how you, as the author, addressed your readers and talked about the characters like you were telling a tale (and well you were) and that really was very effective. I also liked how you titled each character's segment, that was a nice touch. On that note, every title was very fitting to the character's, and I especially loved Peter's and Remus'.
Your descriptions of all your characters are just amazing too. I loved your portrayal of Lily and her 'perfection'. It was very fitting indeed. The entire paragraph beginning from "A soul like hers doesnít go into a war and come out without a trace of tainting, though..." and ending with "...kissing your skin with its wings." was just so beautiful it made my heart melt. Your imagery was just superb here and I really liked it a lot.
Likewise, I enjoyed the segments of James and Sirius and Remus and Peter too. James' description was very impacting, and the narrative had a tone of admiration for him, and that really came through to me which was great. As for Remus, you depicted him so aptly. I was pleased to see that you did complete justice to his complex character while describing him and I just wanted to reach out to him, it was all so moving.
Similarly, you described Sirius' suffering so well, it touched me, and at the same time his description had a kind of 'fire' in it and I just loved that. Finally, Peter, well I have no words. You really showed him in such a different light than how authors usually portray him, and that was brilliant. I liked how you expressed him as the 'lost marauder', and I even managed to sympathise with him a little, and that, my dear, is a great achievement so congrats =)
All in all, your writing was just so perfect. I loved the concept - especially that of ending each character's segment with the same sentence of him/her being a casualty of war - it was very powerful and moving. The grammar was flawless, writing style impeccable, and the flow was very smooth. I really liked this a lot and was totally hooked while reading as well as listening.
I don't have any CC for you at all, this was just so perfect! 10/10!
Author's Response: Hi Angie!! Aww I'm so happy that you liked the podcast enough to come check out the story!
I had a lot of fun kind making this more of an intimate style. I'm so happy that you enjoyed that it was a bit different. I'm sure there will be plenty of people who don't love the odd no narrator sort of thing, but it was so much fun to do!
I think that Lily's section was definitely the softest. I wanted to give her a sort of unearthly feel, and thank you so much for your compliments about the imagery!! You're so sweet!
Sirius and Remus are both such tragic parts about the HP series. They both come so close to having everything they wanted, so close to being able to just live the rest of their lives. And that gets snatched away from them and it's just too sad :(.
I really, really got into Peter's section. I kind of had to make peace with him before starting my Marauders novel, and now I actually get sad when people hate them because, as you said, I've sort of put a different spin on things in my own head.
Thank you so much for leaving me this amazing review, m'dear &heart; And for the tip over at HPPC! Sorry for not replying to that, I read it on my phone and I keep forgetting. But I'll absolutely take your suggestion to keep things less cluttered :)
Thank you again so much m'dear for stopping by and leaving all these wonderful fuzzy feels in me!!!