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Review:soapman333 says:
Oh look at you and your foreshadowing, what fun! I'm not going to lie, I like your writing style, mostly because it's a lot like my own.

Anyways, I like the narrative of this piece. Ellie is certainly a sassy little thing ;) she doesn't take anything too seriously, which allows for her to reflect on sad things in her life without affecting the tone of this work too much.

I'm going to have to say that Albus is my favorite. Why? Because he's a boss! If that kitchen scene wasn't outright flirting, then I don't even know what flirting is anymore! Seriously, that kid is my hero: "You said something, love?" Oh man, I seriously wish I was confident like him! moving on: I've grown somewhat attached to each of the characters you've presented to me (some more than others...), which is fantastic! The aloof father...the musically gifted brother...the gullible best friend...the sexy beast future boyfriend (*cough* awkward *cough*).

Overall, I was laughing and giggling like a teenage girl whilst reading this chapter. Thanks for sending it to me to review!


Author's Response: Hello!

Yes, me and my foreshadowing - and it is fun... or it will be. And thanks for liking my writing style. Sometimes I think I write a little too weirdly.

Ellie does seem to not take things too seriously. More about that is revealed later, but a lot of it comes from the fact that she was exposed to pretty serious stuff from a young age, and she kinda learnt to let it go, and not become overly angsty about it.

Very few people picked up on that! So well done! Yeah, Albus is flirting a little, but Ellie doesn't realise it at all. It kind of sets the precedent for almost all their conversations.

You're attached to the characters already? That's wonderful! There's another major one that you'll meet in the next chapter (for which I shall go rerequest as soon as I've finished this reply) and I think you'll like them as well!

And thank you so much for your wonderful review!

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