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Review:caoty says:
Hello, I'm here from Review Tag.

Okay, so - Pansy/Harry. I quite like this 'ship, and it's difficult to find especially post-DH, so thank you for writing them.

Anyway. Moving on. Your imagery's lovely; your description of Harry's wedding band is particularly effective, as is the implied image of Harry sitting in Limbo and having to decide between Heaven and Hell. He's completely trapped in his own desires and decisions.

I will mention, though, that I think this particular line:
The room was dim and smelt of dust, wax and ink, hanging thick and low in the air, mixed with a delicious hint of vanilla, sandalwood and peach.
might be a little too much - it's not easy to differentiate six smells from one another, because they diffuse in the same air, after all.

The flow of this one-shot almost seems effortless, which suits its quiet, first-person, introspective nature extremely well, and makes its 'in medias res' time frame (setting?) seem natural instead of jarring.

A bit more criticism before I shut up: I'm not completely sold on Pansy. It's probably just a side-effect of your choice of more introspective narration for Harry, but I don't get a real sense of Pansy other than baby blue eyes and sexual tension/possible temptation. I'm not really sure how to feel about that because on one hand this one-shot might be more about Harry's self-absorption and desires than anything else, but on the other hand Pansy is a distinctive enough character in canon that I'm wondering if Harry shouldn't have more complex feelings towards her.

Anyway - well done on writing this (I did enjoy it, despite my criticisms), and I'll see you around on the forums. :)

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