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Review:Bobby Dazzler says:
Lol, I feel like cheeseball now... That was cute Courtney, I too love Seamus :)

I liked how it showed life beyond Hogwarts for him and Dean which was easier to connect back to how they would've got to that stage from school. Seamus being a bartender was great after his fondness for trying to make his own alcohol with magic. And referring to him and the past explosions, classic. I would've loved it though if you went into Ava's background more, as to how they met or what she was like at school, or what she did before her job at the ministry, or even how they met. I think her character could've been developed a lot more to try and build her up and make us as readers understand more why Seamus wanted to marry her, and how they fell in love.

I can't say I liked the gangster inclusion in this, it kinda stuck out like a sore thumb to me, but aside from that, I think it was well written and entertaining. I could feel Seamus' awkwardness. I was expecting the other patrons of the cafe to have clapped or been involved in the ending after him shouting his proposal and obviously being aware of the situation. That aspect of it kind of went quiet and was incomplete.

I think it was cute enough, not a cheeseball, but I would've liked it if Ava's character and their history together was explained a little more, as they're about to spend the rest of their lives together... Nice work :)

Author's Response: Hehehe, yep, this is definitely the fluffiest thing I have ever written!

Thanks for the lovely review!

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