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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hey again! I'm so glad you find my reviews semi helpful/insightful/thoughtful/good or any other appropriate word-I'm happy to be back!

I first want to say that I think that your writing has improved so much since the first chapter, which is great to see. It really means your developing as an author, and also getting into the plot of this story and your characters. For me, the highlight of this chapter was your lovely use of description and imagery. I think my personal favourite was your description of the manor. You really painted a very clear picture on my head and your language was lovely-simple, but lovely. And sometimes simple things are the best. I also thought the line: 'This manor has demons of its own just like Nicolas will' was very thought provoking-possible foreshadowing perhaps? I am eager to find out!

After the manor paragraph, I did feel like the next part of the chapter dragged on a little. Mikaela's thoughts seemed quite random and disjointed-and didn't seem to add a lot to the plot. I think I way to improve this would be to try and make the paragraphs in this section longer, rather than just having lines.

Overall, I think this was a good chapter. Mikaela's character is coming on nicely, and I'm looking forward to some new characters being introduced. There were a few spelling issues in there, but those can easily be fixed with a quick edit.

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hellooo,
Omg, I'm so glad you're noticing the improvement in my writing style.
Hahaha, yay! I'm over the top now :D
Thankyou soo much!
Yes Nicolas would be one interesting chracter.
Thankyouu! :D


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