Your description amazed yet again! I think the best description in the chapter, was the horse at the beginning, it just made the animal so much more dynamic, and it made you view it in so many new ways. I don’t find it too much at all, I love it!
This is coming from a vegetarian and animal rights supporter, so yeah! I just thought the whole hunting scene was great, first of all it fitted in with historical activities of the time which is really good, as I have read some founders stories where the characters are watching TV, and that made me immediately stop reading. Then it conveyed so many emotions, the tension of whether he would get it, and then the happiness it did. Again the description was great, and a key aspect of the scenes success.
You included a Black! I love that family, as I just find it so intriguing that it has ‘blood traitors’ and death eaters in it. I also loved it as it made sense that the Black family was there, as they are ancient, and probably friends with the Selwyns. It also adds something special to the story by keeping it canon.
I liked that little about Priscilla not being able to be compared to Helena! It just made me realise how much that little visit affected Venn, and seeing a man against marriage being softened, is adorable.
I rather like Venn’s perspective of the world, as it’s quite cynical and he makes so many observations that others normally wouldn’t, it makes a refreshing read.
I liked how you showed the tension build up between the four founders. I found it interesting that it developed, as obviously if they only admitted purebloods at the start, they wouldn’t encounter any problems, but now Godric wants to open it to others you can see the tension and feuds begin. I like how you’ve included the four founders, they’re not the main characters, yet they still feature in the story, and that’s really well done.
As I just mentioned in Yellow, one of my favourite parts of the chapter! I actually knew one of the terms today, which was harpy, which I felt impressed by:D
Author's Response: Hi again!
I have mixed feelings about the hunting scene because I got some (much-needed) feedback that the imagery felt a little heavy-handed there. But it's lovely to hear that you enjoyed it and felt like you could really picture the scene. Please tell me you haven't actually run across Founders' stories with TV in them!!
The Black family members are always playing up their ancient-ness, so it seemed fitting to put them in here. Lestrange is also a name that immediately came to me, though I definitely considered others (the Princes, for example). I like Cepheus a lot.
Venn is still very stubborn, but you're right, he's starting to fall for our dear Helena. At the very least, he can't deny how beautiful and dynamic she is, how she always interests him. Who else could get him to be so impulsive?
To be honest, I'm not terribly interested in stories that focus directly on the Founders. They just seem really far-removed to me, though I really enjoy including them as characters here since they aren't the leads. Salazar and Rowena do figure prominently, as you've seen, and Helga and Godric make multiple appearances (or at least they will). It's great that you like the brewing tension.
Thanks for another wonderful review, love :)