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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hello again-thanks for re-requesting.

I think I said it in my last review, but I'll say it again anyway: I really like the spin you have taken on the classic pregnancy story. The fact that Flick has not been in the wizarding world since getting pregnant makes a lot of sense, as I get the feeling that becoming pregnant at sixteen in the wizarding world would not be looked at very highly. Because of this, I really liked the way you wrote the Diagon Alley scene. Flick was clearly so embarrassed and wanted to get out of there quickly before anyone saw her, which I can totally relate to. I like the way you are developing her character-she is becoming very believable and realistic, with no qualities that are completely ridiculous or random.

Bentley and Aubri (I love all your names, by the way) see very cute, and I'd like to find out more about them-maybe see Flick interact with them a little more, at least before she goes back to Hogwarts. Ria also seems like a good character-very organised and headstrong, which seems to be a nice comparison to Flick.

You finished off this chapter very nicely, making the reader more curious as to what is going to happen next. I have a feeling Albus might be the father, but I could be wrong. I usually suck at guessing.

I don't really have an major CC's for this chapter. Your spelling and grammar was great-just be careful not to switch from the past tense to the present. I noticed that you tend to do this during Flick's thoughts.

Anyway, this was a great chapter-nice job.

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hello again :D

Yep, I think even the fact you're a witch and pregnant at sixteen, you'll still get dirty looks off people and the usual 'tags' of being a young mum. She also didn't want to bump into any one she knew because she never told them she was pregnant.

Thanks, I love all their names as well. All orginal and cute :)

Hmm, you might be right.. ;)

Whoops, I'll have to go over and check it.
Thanks for reviewing!
-Potterfan310
Soph :) xx



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