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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello there! Iím here with your review :D

I rather liked having a glimpse of Dracoís POV, as it made a change of things! It was nice to see how much he cared for his daughter, as some people make him out to be heartless, but I think this portrayal of him is a lot more accurate.

I liked that you made Mikaela listen to muggle bands as it made her a little different, you are aware that it is Coldplay not Cold Play though? Or was that just an intended play on words? I think it was a little confusing changing to her POV, so I would add a title to her section just to make sure the reader isnít confused.

It was nice to get a description of Mikaela as we didnít really learn much about her physical appearance in the previous chapter, but here we get to see what she looks like, and that helps the reader visualise her better in their mind, and it means that we connect with her more.

You have some spacing issues with your paragraph. Some of them are rather on the long side, so splitting them up would make easier reading. Also sometimes you needed an extra space between two paragraphs, as the new one was still attached to the old one (I know it doesnít make much sense, but if you read it over, youíll get what I mean!).

I liked reading Mikaelaís thoughts though as theyíre very lively and interesting to read.

This was a good chapter, and it showed a big improvement on the last!

-Kiana!

Author's Response: Hey There, I'm glad you like this one more than the previous one.
I'm finally getting the hang of it. And I will be going back and editing this chapter very soon. So the paragraphing would be better then.
Mikaela has finally started to grow on people and I am so glad for that! Can't wait to request another review. Thankyouuu
-x
Em


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