Hello I’m here from the swap! I saw that this story looked a little lonely, and I love the founders era, so I came to check it out!
I liked the description of Helena through the Bloody Baron’s eyes, as I really liked how he viewed her as not exactly the conventional beauty. I guess with her being the child of Rowena Ravenclaw, she wouldn’t be, as I always imagined Rowena as a sort of feminist, and therefore she would be going against convention.
You could tell how much he loved her, as he seemed to have analysed every part of her, and that just shows how much he loved, though it does seem to be more of an obsessive form of love, rather than a romantic one, and Helena seemed to recognise that, from her annoyance at him staring at her.
You could see that she had inherited her mother’s feminist streak, due to her insistence on not marrying him, and of studying which was uncommon for women in that time. The Baron seemed to have recognised that, due to him calling her ‘headstrong’. I guess as he’s a Slytherin, he probably saw someone like Helena as a challenge to gain her affections.
I liked the dream part of the chapter, as it was nice to see a more innocent form of their friendship, and it made me laugh about how sure he was that he would marry Helena someday. I guess her disappearing is showing how much she would hate to marry him, as running away would be a better alternative. By Rowena not wearing her diadem, I guess you mean that Helena had stolen it?
I really like how you built up his obsession of her through the years that she wasn’t there, and that his obsessive love grew. It seemed a more fitting reason as to why he would kill her, as she ran away after kissing him, and that seemed to be the end of their potential relationship, so the only way to continue would be to kill her.
I really loved the ending scene, it seemed so poignant, as it just showed you how much Helena Ravenclaw had changed to become the Grey Lady.
I thought this was an excellent one-shot, and it was a really interesting perspective to explore!
Author's Response: Wow, I'm glad you liked it :D It was more of an experiment for me to write this one, and I haven't gotten much feedback on it. I'm grateful that you decided to review this one :D
I was sitting at my laptop, thinking of why he would kill her, so I decided to take the "obsessive love" approach to it. Wow, you've really taken the time to analyze this. I'm smiling like a two year old reading what you came up with :P
Because this one-shot was from Baron's perspective, I decided that he probably wouldn't have figured out that Helena had stolen the diadem, because only the Grey Lady knows its location. I made the assumption that Rowena would keep it a secret that her daughter would betray her like that, so she told everyone that she refused to wear it.
Thanks! Oh, something interesting I kind of explored is the mythology of the Siren (hence the title) and his obsession with her voice. Just a cool tid-bit for you :D