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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey there! I saw your post in the Single Spell Challenge thread and decided to check out your story (I have entered too) =)

This was definitely a very well-written piece. I would liked to know more about who your main character was - I guess he was an OC - but I assume you've stressed more on his emotions rather than his character so that's fine too.

I enjoyed how the narrative switched from present (torture) to past (love). The transitions were very beautifully done, and the entire story had a haunting feel to it.

Jayme dying so suddenly and painfully was so heartbreaking, and the pain felt by your MC was very tangible throughout the piece.

And what can you feel when youíve felt all there is to feel? - this line really got to me. It's like, he lost all ability to feel after watching his love die so ruthlessly, ghosh the feels!

The flashbacks were all incorporated really nicely too, and they gave an added insight into the relationship between Jayme and your MC, which was great.

All in all, your plot was heartwrenching, writing style was great, flow was very smooth, and the grammar was fine. It made for a marvellous story, and in fact I liked it so much, I'd love to podcast it. I am going to PM you about it on the forums and I hope you agree.

It was a pleasure reading this great piece of writing. Good work!

9/10

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hello! Thanks so much for the review! It totally made my day! I cannot wait to see the podcast, and once again, I am so honored! :)

Camille


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