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Review:Courtney Dark says:
First I want to say I'm so sorry this review took quite a while-real life has started getting in the way . Sometimes I wish I could just live on the internet, because I'm anti social like that!

Anyway.

This was another great chapter and I love the fact that Louis' personality is starting to shine through. I can definitely see traits of both his mother and father shining through-he is clearly headstrong and determined, like Bill, but I think he is a bit more serious, which is always great (and unusual) to see in a male character in next generation.
The thing I love most about this story is that it is believable, not at all cliche or annoying and that it is told through the father's eyes and that he sees all the problems of teen pregnancies and is being logical about it. Okay, admittedly that was way more than the one thing I like best about your story...but I've never been very good at maths.

Anyway, I thought the spreading rumours you talked about in this chapter were a nice touch, mainly because they made this chapter feel so real. If I'm being honest, there have been several girls at my college who have left school after becoming pregnant and the rumours have spread like that spreadable butter you get in tubs.

I'm looking forward to finding out what happens next...especially how Freya will react to the secret of her pregnancy becoming...not so secret. Oh, and I also can't wait to see their parents reactions.

Awesome chapter.
Courtney:)

Author's Response: I'm really sorry this has taken me so long to reply to, Real life huh? I wish I could live on the internet too and not be sociable at all :D

I didn't want Louis to come off as another dead beat dad who didn't really care about things affecting him. I think it's definately Bill that has kept him level headed and able to deal with serious issues like this one.
Yay, I'm glad that you think it's believable, I was worried that it wouldn't come across as too believable at all. Aww you're amazing! :D
Oh yes, I can't imagine many people not spreading rumours, I remember rumours being spread back when I went to school, yes definately like the spreadable butter :D
I can't wait for you to read more, I really hope that you'll enjoy it as much as you've been enjoying these other chapters.
All of the reactions are coming up soon :D
Thank you once again Courtney! :D


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