And we’re back to Darcy and Dom! I rather like the fact that you changed POV on each chapter, as it meant we got to explore a new perspective, and learn more about certain characters. It was also fun to see the difference between being the celebrity, and writing about celebrities.
I love the idea about Rose and Lily being a double act, due to them both being red heads, it made me laugh so much! Especially the fact they ran their own agency, before Albus stepped in. I felt a little sorry for Dom, as she seemed kind of embarrassed that they were her cousins. It did make me laugh, that their fame is on the up though. Just the thought of them being celebrities makes me laugh; it’s just so cool and original!
Ooh I sensed a thing with Darcy when she saw Albus for the first time. The fact that she said he had ‘brilliant green eyes’ suggests something to me, and I don’t know whether to get excited about a prospective relationship for the two of them or not.
The fact that Rose is the big headed one, and is too good for Witch Weekly, whereas Lily is the one encouraging her to do it, makes me laugh, as it just puts the characters on their head, as its usually the other way round. I really like this twist though, and I think this is one of my favourite versions of Rose yet! Then she has a house elf, and she’s Hermione’s daughter! I really want to know what her reaction is to having a daughter like Rose.
Yes Dom agrees with me about the whole Al and Darcy thing. Aw it’s so cute and adorable, and I just want them to be together now, even though he called her Darby and they’ve barely talked!
I’m really liking Darcy at the moment, she just seems so funny, and unique and is just awesome really!
A little Brit pick, no one tends to say porch here, I guess the best alternative would be path:)
This story is just great, and it makes me laugh throughout. I’m just so amazed you can write things like Yellow and Diamonds into Coal so well, and this is so great as well, yet they’re both so different!
Author's Response: Hey Kiana :)
As I'm sure you've noticed, lately I've been a big fan of this POV-switching thing. It's not going to be like that forever--I tend to stick with one more general POV when the sets of characters merge. I'm glad you find it interesting, though!
It's great that you like my characterization of Rose and Lily. I have a lot of fun playing up the contrast in their personalities and letting them just react to other people in the world. Sometimes they do tend to act like they're a little more famous than they currently are, especially dear Rose. It's also good that their characterizations feel opposite of the cliches. I don't read enough next gen to have a really good grasp on what a cliche Lily is (I'm a bit better with Rose), so I'm glad it all works.
Albus and Darcy may have some feelings brewing, or at least a little romantic tension. It's great that you like Darcy and want to see her and Albus become an item. Stay tuned :)
Well, I'm American, so I generally write like one. I don't really think much about Britpicking when I'm writing, unless it happens to feel "right" in the moment, usually with dialogue. Still, I appreciate the critique.
Thanks so much for your really lovely review!