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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:

Hey there, its Gabbie with your requested review and once again, my apologies for not immediately attacking it. So, the beginning of this chapter was interesting, it was nice getting into Draco's mind and seeing how he thinks about everything. I sort of wanted a bit more of a personal backstory with him, perhaps talking a bit more about his feelings for his wife. From what I could gather, aside from that hug, they don't seem all that close and I was wondering if that was just how you wrote it or if I had read it wrong. On other things, I can sense his worry for his daughter really well but I wonder how he and Scorpius are going to get along now? Is something really major going to happen between them? Sort of got me worried.
With Mikeala's thoughts later on in the chapter, I liked that she was trying to get away and thinking at the same time. It seems like being busy helps her out more than anything and I enjoyed how her thoughts kept bouncing around. She was weighing her options and in the end, she decided that she had really no chance of abandoning her family. No matter that she was saying her family name meant alot to her, I couldn't really see if she was nice, mean or anti-social. I'm not sure about that with her, to be honest! D':
But now she's stranded in the middle of nowhere but perhaps she'll get some help from that old couple? Hahaah. I hope so and I can't wait to see what happens later on!
As for CC's, I think this chapter was pretty okay when it came to grammar and all that. Some sentences could be smoother but the flow was good and your story is shaping up pretty nicely. :)
Thanks for the read!
Much love,

Author's Response: Heyy there,
You give me such happy reviews. The length of them always melts me away. :')
I am so glad that you liked this better.
Draco and Astoria have a very different sort of relationship.Its the kind you expect from Draco, given his past. Mikaela is like him, you will see through the characters in a while.
Wow, you really are getting to know the character of Mikaela.
And the mystery relationship of Scorpius and Draco shall be saved for later.
I have to keep some attraction of awesome people like you to read my story.
I can't wait to re request another review from you.

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