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Review:megthechef43 says:
Aquabluez17,


At first I thought this was way back in time because the feel of it was from the Salem Witch Trials in 1962. Emylina being tied to a post and being tortured again feels old timey. Plus the premise of no sex before marriage is so old school to be Next-Gen and I wouldn't have know this was Next-Gen if it hadn't been for James Sirius Potter being in the chapter. Maybe that is what you were going for with the village being out of the way of anything that the society was a bit backwards.

That being said I like the idea you have going on, I am digging the all men can't be trusted vibe. From reading your summary I am a little worried about the story so I am going to point a few things to ponder as you continue to write this story. Why would James be a gold-digger? I got the feel from the books that Potter was old-money and Harry was not lacking so why would his son unless he is a gambler or wiled away his money in some other way. Just a thought I had.

I was really confused as to what was going on in this story for almost the whole chapter. I wish we had heard a little more of her story and why and how Richard left. Plus I would like to know more about Richard and if he is related to the Potters in some way. That part intrigues me quite a bit.

This was a lot to take in but I think you did a good job getting the facts out and setting the pace for the story. You did leave a lot of open questions that your readers will want to know over the course of your story, such as what her father did to gain the ministries attention. I really want to know more about James and his thoughts.

Good chapter though!

Meg

Author's Response: Hey Meg =)

Thanks for the review! Im glad you liked it. That was the point of the whole village thing. It was done on purpose trust me haha.

Yeah I ended up changing the summary mostly since I kinda changed the plans for the story :P Thank you for pointing that out!

That will come later and I didn't want to give too much away haah.

Im glad you liked it! Thank you for reviewing!


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