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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Jami!

I was wondering whether I should cheat, and use the review tag as a chance to read another chapter of Before They Fall, but I thought I should come and check out some of your other work instead!

I really liked Fleurís thoughts at the beginning of this chapter, as I had to agree with her, on how even though theyíre so young, theyíve been through so much, and itís just horrible. Iíve always held a soft spot for Bill and Fleur, so her thoughts about his scarring, and how she wasnít disgusted by it, but thought it was a mark of bravery was great.

Fleur just seemed so brave, and I know a lot of people put her down, mainly due to her being part Veela, but I donít think thatís deserved, as seeing the war and fighting from her perspective made you realise how strong she actually is.

The narration was very unique, and though it took a while to get used to it, once I had I really enjoyed it, as it seemed to show the story in a different light.

Fleur became so attached to all of the Weasleys, even though she was treated as an outsider at first. There were so many scenes which were so poignant, for example when theyíre gathered round Fred, and Charlie talks about the blood on her, yet she doesnít seem to care that much. And her comforting Ginny, brought tears to my eyes, as they were always enemies but, it was so nice to see that they finally managed to bond.

The way she was going to hand herself over to the werewolf she just seemed to ooze bravery, and it reminded me of the way Joan of Arc got burnt to death, and itís fitting as theyíre both French! I never expected that, and I just felt so proud of her.

That was just a brilliant one-shot, and Iím glad that I came here instead, as it was so nice to see Fleur so brave, and not the girly girl, people think she is!

-Kiana :D

P.S. You say my name KEY-ah-Nah ;D

Author's Response: Hiii Kiana ♥

I'm so happy you chose this piece! But don't ever feel bad about reviewing a BTF chapter if you run into me on review tag!

I'm happy you adjusted to the narration! This was my first time writing in second person point of view, so it was definitely an experiment. It was fun to give that sort of detached feeling, without making it as impersonal as third person would have been.

I LOVE brave Fleur! I'm so glad that you think she deserves the bad attention she gets for being a Veela, either. Not that she doesn't have her negatives. She is very full of herself and too blunt, but she was also strong enough to marry a man so involved in the war, to ignore his families disapproval, and to keep fighting along side these people.

Awww I love that you felt proud of her!! It was hard to try and figure out how these two (Fleur and Greyback) could have a strange meeting for the challenge, and this ended up falling into place the best. She wanted revenge on this monster for what he did to her husband, and she also kept her head calm enough to figure out how to handle the situation without getting herself killed. Go Fleur!

I'm so happy you liked this. Thank you so much Kiana for your lovely comments ♥ Your reviews are always so thorough and perceptive, it's crazy how much you pick up in terms of little details!!

♥ Jami


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