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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi Angie!! I think this is a really creative start. The idea if being in the forest surrounded by werewolves all changing is really, really eerie.

I particularly liked that she was afraid of the wolves. I think that's a very human reaction, and even her families close connection to the late Remus wouldn't ruin that. As she points out, she sees her fathers face maimed by the attack of one. I was really pleased that you went that route instead of her not fearing them at all.

I loved the anxiety the entire situation creates. From her running around the cottage to the fact that she can't apparate from inside of it all lead the reader to really get nervous.

I enjoyed her thoughts on her life as well. How even though she isn't prejudice, she couldn't handle her perfect life being tainted by such a horrible catastrophe. I'm really excited to see how she deals with this.

This was a really strong first chapter, m'dear. If I could suggest anything, I think it would be to have a wolf tell her the moon is coming only minutes before. Because I did find it hard to believe that anyone would stay to finish things up, no matter what they are, in that kind of situation. Especially since she can just return in less than 24 hours to pack or finish up. So having only been told that they were mere minutes from changing might help that :) maybe she had to go back to het cottage to get her wand? but that's obviously a small CC and didn't take away the this first chapter what so ever!

Author's Response: Hey! Thank you so much for reviewing this for me!

I am pleased you liked this start, and liked the idea of her being in the forest and such.

I am glad you liked that Dom was afraid of the wolves as that is a vital part of the story. Indeed, it is a human reaction and seeing her father's face would evoke it definitely. I find the whole idea of not fearing them very cliche - as it is clearly seen in canon that general society fears them - so I am glad you liked my choice.

I am pleased to hear that you enjoyed the anxiety and it all came through to you.

I wanted her life to be near-perfect and so it would be even more horrific for her to have it 'tainted', and its great to know you enjoyed her thoughts on that. I hope I can do justice to your excitement in further chapters!

I am so happy you found this to be strong! Thank you so much for your lovely suggestion. I am going to edit that in right away and make it that she's informed that the moon is only minutes away! You're certainly right, seeing her fear, if she had known for longer she'd have scurried away instantly. Thank you so much once again!

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