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Review:Remus says:
Heya! Perelandra here from the forums! Thanks for the swap by the way! :D

So I have to say... I'm never really inclined to read stories that don't feature any of the canon characters. I'm always very cautious because the OCs tend to be very cliche, or very Mary/Gary-Stu. However, as soon as I finished reading Camille's section I was hooked. I wanted to know more of what was going to happen in the story and what was happening to the characters.

Within each section I managed to see a different personality in all of them. No one felt like a cookie-cutter character that had the same thoughts and feelings. The imagery and description were fantastic as well; I was able to imagine everything in my head. It had this Schindler's List sort of tone to it.

I spotted a tiny typo...or at least I think it's a typo:

His mother has disappeared, separated from him and his father as soon as the stepped off the train. Did you mean 'as they stepped'?

I find it very brave of you to write around something that's historic, specially when you're just a teenager. So lots of kudos to you! :) You said that there's a character here that is linked to a canon one and that its fairly obvious...but I just don't know who! Hahaha! Is it Astrid related to Fleur? XD I don't really have that much to say considering that this is only the prologue of a story that I have a feeling is going to go much more in depth as it progresses.

Anyway, this story is fantastic! I'm adding it to my faves so I can can come back and read the rest! Thank you so much for letting me read this and the swap!

Until next time

--Rosie

Author's Response: Hi Rosie!

Thank you so, so much for the compliments on my OCs -- I was worried they'd pass for cookie-cutter characters and it's great to hear that's not the case!

Yes, that is a typo (pesky bugger). Thank you for pointing it out, I'll edit.

Yes, Astrid is related to Fleur, but as you said, that was fairly obvious :)

Thank you for reading, leaving such a lovely review and favouriting!


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