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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello!

I'm so terribly sorry for how long this review has taken :(. I have no excuse but RL got in the way so apolagies.

This was a really interesting chapter - exploring the kind of awkward phase after a kiss. I thought Connor was a bit mean - he seems to give all these hints about liking Rose and kissing her but hardly has a full conversation with her. Boys. I look forward to the two of them having a proper conversation soon.

You've painted a sweet picture of James, Kola and Carly - they seem to be in a good relationship at the moment. Poor Rose though - getting left to babysit!

I did notice one typo:
'I looked around and saw Connor come running towards me. My heart jumped a little when I saw him, he looked so good. I can't believe I haven't seen him for ten days, his hair is spiked and he's smiling.' The last sentence here seems to change tense - I think it should be 'I couldn't believe I hadn't seen him for ten days, his hair was spiked and he was smiling.'

Another sweet chapter though :) I enjoyed it!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hey :)
Don't worry it's fine xx

Boys: where to start, one of the most awkward thins on the planet. Lol :D

Oh, there are a few proper conversations to come. There may be good ones and there may be bad ones but there is more interaction!!

Thanks for pointing that out, I've now edited it :)

-Potterfan310
Soph x


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