I really enjoyed this first chapter, and I meant to come back and finish the rest of it, so thank you for giving me a well needed nudge!
I loved those little details you included about Hermioneís office, they just added so much to the story. The fact that you could see the London Eye, and their insistence on keeping the fireplace, just added something special to the story, and it just made me feel as if I knew them that little bit better thanks to them.
It was nice that you included some backstory to the other characters as well. I was so pleased that Crookshanks was still alive, as Iíve always wanted a cat like her, and I would have been pretty upset if she had died! So Harry and Ginny are married then, I wonder whether Ron will get his act together and propose to Hermione or not. You write about him not being very romantic, he just seems to be nervous and embarrassed to be romantic.
And S.P.E.W. still exists! That again made me so happy, as some people disregard things which were rather in HP, and thatís so annoying. It was funny that her and Luna joined forces to help fight for elf rights, but kind of sweet as well.
I really loved Ronís characterisation it seemed spot on, and the fact that he was soppy over Crookshanks made me laugh. My Dadís the same, he claims he hates cats, but I do catch him, petting them secretly!
I thought this was a great chapter, and you can expect to see me back!
Author's Response: Yay, thank you for coming back (and again and again)!
I do love the little details, because I want to try and get an image of what's going on in my head across to the reader. I have such a clear picture of Hermione's office in my head, but I don't want to get all over excited and describe it to death... how dull would that be? So yeah... just keep it to the little details and let the images form in my readers minds!
Haha, Crookie. I enjoyed including him. My boyfriend's just the same as Ron is, with my cat. And my dad was the same with my old dog.
I think you've hit the nail on the head with Ron, there. I think Hermione doesn't realise that he maybe *wants* to be romantic but is too nervous and embarrassed... In fact you've given me an idea for a later chapter with that, so thank you!
Haha I may have been taking a bit of a liberty getting Luna involved in elf rights, but I quite like the idea of her working with Hermione. They're so different, but I think they'd have a lot to learn from each other. And of course, they did their final year at school together.